Lamp with fringe shade

Once upon a time, in the picturesque county of Wiltshire, somewhere among its rolling downland and chalk river valleys, low lying vales and ancient forests lay a village of a hundred houses called Portsmere Heath. To the south of this quaint little place was a steep hill facing south west. The great King’s Road entered the village through the West-gate at the foot of the hill, curved to the right and upwards, ascending with the green, velvety slope. The east side of the town was surrounded by acres of woodland teeming with fauna and flora, where deer and other wild game roamed at will. Approaching the north, the open woods grew darker and more dense, providing extensive and nearly continuous shade, with little light peering through the largely closed canopies. It was also unnaturally quiet, and if any chirping or tweeting was heard, it probably belonged to a stray bird that must have wandered off too far.
This is a description I've written for the introduction of my new short story. It was quite hard for me and I am only half-happy with the outcome. I have never really described landscapes before and, with English not being my native language, this makes it even more of a challenge. What is your honest opinion? I am not looking for a fake pat on the back or words that "it's okay for a non-native"...
And, more importantly, how can I practice writing, particularly aspects of it, such as place descriptions that I find particularly difficult? By reading more, enrolling in a writing class, continuing to write even if I suck at it? How do people learn to craft beautiful and immersive descriptions? Sometimes, I feel so inadequate reading other writers' work.
Thanks for taking time to read and answer!

This is simply my random thoughts regarding who the "sinner" is I apologize for any lore mistakes I make ahead of time for those that simply know a LOT more than I do by reading all the books etc in game :)
First of all I assume you have played through the "caribert" storyline before reading this.
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Ok now given that it seems dain KNOWS who the sinner is and simply hasnt told the traveller because he says before hand that "time is not a limitation for one such as him" or along those lines.
First I believe that the "sinner" is responsible for the curse of immortality itself not the gods and directly or indirectly for the curse of the wilderness. (the hilichurl tranformation on non-pure khaenrian's)
To me it's likely it wasnt even meant to be a curse but an empowerment for the khaenrians but celestia when they responded (the cataclysm) made it go awry so their true unchanging immortality was tainted with loss of mind and other errors.(erosion?) Immortality is not a natural state, decay is. With death life returns.
When clothar and the abyss sibling visited the chamber where the sinner was, the proximity to it was enough for the sinner to override the abyss siblings protection and directly influence them. He also at that time cleansed clothar of the curse (while also inserting command instructions into poor clothar's mind) and allowed him to pass on special imbuement to his son caribert. (which is quite possibly kaeya's father)
This ability to use power to influence other entities I believe we've seen many times.
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Rhinedotter made DURIN the shadow dragon, but she doesnt seem to be inherently evil at all , she seems to care for albedo like a son , if a good friend of alice. Again the sinner likely took control of rhinedotter's dragon and dvalin had to stop it ; getting tainted in the process. She also made the rifthounds but again it looks likes they also got co-opted by the sinner.
Ever wonder why the frost nail hit right there where it did in dragonspine? To cleanse corruption of course. In the Chasm we see the abyss order trying to contaminate the nail that's there so the shadow mud can take over. The removable walls in the chasm have a diamond symbol just like the diamond of the sinner. They are removed by light from your stone.
Orobashi who supposedly read a book and then attacked the raiden shogun? What does that sound like to you. Forbidden knowledge! supposedly which allowed the sinner to take control of orobashi. ever wonder why there is tatarigami where orobashi died and creatures with dark auras? The foul taint of the possession still mars that land.
The thunderbird: Raiden killed the bird for what reason? We dont know but likely again the sinner (who is a dark fate entity) took contol maybe empowered it and it was going to detonate over inazuma's main island instead of over serai where raiden got it. The time ripping on tsurumi island where the thunderbird is from, the presence of rift hounds all point the finger at him a dark entity of time and fate.
King deshret: Got depressed after his wife (the god of flowers) was killed, he blamed the gods and turned away from them. But maybe the sinner again was at work, turned somebody against another leading to her death. Then Deshret reading forbidden texts became suddenly exposed directly to the sinners machinations and again the sinner took control of deshret. Luckily rukkadevata had an answer but it took her giving up thousands of years of wisdom to remove the corruption on deshret and he died anyway but the sinner at least was stopped that time.
King Irmun: The one eyed king likely was the host for the sinner (via forbidden knowledge conduit) which allowed him to go to war with the other archon's lands, turning advanced harvest machinery into weapons of war. I also believe natlan is to the west of where the main overground entrance to khaenriah is located, with sumera to the east. Natlan being warlike as they are probably put up quite a good fight even against machines of war and fought him to a standstill.
The archon war: If we're assuming the sinner can influence , control or outright possess entities why not other gods? He's more powerful than them. This could very well have been the cause of the archon war and why some gods allied and some just died along the way.
Xiao himself had his mind captured by one of the "dark gods" which are likely subservient to the sinner. Xiao fights demons.. so what are they if not just darkly infused entities.
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I know it's a lot to blame the sinner for all of this, but who better than a defeated but powerful simmering imprisoned entity who is likely the second who came.
I believe his power level is above the 7 archons, so more on par with the primordial one which means it's likely that he's the "second who came" who went to war with the primordial one and lost. (which is why he appears imprisoned) but even in this state he's still incredibly powerful just restricted. So he's had to work through proxies, but look at the damage he's done to the world.
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Another no proof crazy theory I have is that the traveller had a conversation with the sustainer after they were captured (at the beginning of the game) and like "the bourne identity" agreed to try and save teyvat from the sinner's machinations by going "undercover". But since the sinner has the ability to get information from the entirety of time the traveller was forced to forget (and likely paimon as well) so they would not be discovered as being agents for the sustainer. They were placed in a particular time frame (500 years after the cataclysm) for the plan to work. Likely theres a special key that involves coming into contact with all 7 gods that will reveal that which was hidden and the sinner's machinations can be stopped.
Maybe paimon is a transformed and forced to forget shade of the primordial one. She'll have her day in the sun at the end of the tale when at last the sinner is eradicated from teyvat.
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I dont know if any of this is right or i'm barking up the tree in a completely crazed manner , maybe it's simply what i'd like to be true in the story.
If you have any comments or thing you think I need to change because of this or that, that you know to be true then dont hesitate.